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« on: January 12, 2011, 11:19:13 AM »

Just been proofreading my (three) poems in the latest anthology from Leaf Books. Never mind the poetry, I LOVE this extract from the introduction:

“The winning poem was ‘ripeness is all’ by the multi-talented Catherine Edmunds. It has a sort of a dreamscape quality that we all found very intriguing: the setting was somehow very clear and very profoundly realised but lush and strange and almost shifting underneath that clarity. It’s brilliantly imagistic (sorry to use the same word twice on one page but it’s hard to think of a synonym), it doesn’t over-explain itself and it invites multiple readings. We like that sort of thing.”
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« Reply #1 on: January 12, 2011, 11:37:50 AM »

Very nice comments.  Gratz!
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« Reply #2 on: January 12, 2011, 11:56:52 AM »

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« Reply #3 on: January 12, 2011, 12:03:49 PM »

And 'we like that sort of thing', too!

Great stuff.

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« Reply #4 on: January 12, 2011, 12:07:03 PM »

“The winning poem was ‘ripeness is all’ by the multi-talented Catherine Edmunds. It has a sort of a dreamscape quality that we all found very intriguing: the setting was somehow very clear and very profoundly realised but lush and strange and almost shifting underneath that clarity. It’s brilliantly imagistic (sorry to use the same word twice on one page but it’s hard to think of a synonym), it doesn’t over-explain itself and it invites multiple readings. We like that sort of thing.”

“The winning poem IS [was - THIS SENTENCE CANT BE IN THE PAST TENSE, IF THE REST OF THE 'BLURB' IS IN THE PRESENT TENSE, I DONT THINK]  ‘ripeness is all’ by the multi-talented Catherine Edmunds. It has a sort of a dreamscape quality [that - PLEONASM] we all found [very - VERY IS VERY REPETITIOUS]] MOST  intriguing: the setting was somehow very clear and [very - TO MANY VERYS AND IT STARTS TO SOUND LIKE 'WANK'] profoundly realised but lush and strange and almost shifting underneath [that - WHICH CLARITY IS 'THAT CLARITY'?] THE clarity. It’s brilliantly imagistic (sorry to use the same word twice on one page but it’s hard to think [SOMETIMES WE ALL HAVE PROBLEMS THINKING - BUT I DONT SEEM TO FIND MUCH SYMPATHY FOR THIS 'FAILURE TO THINK.... SORRY] of a synonym), it doesn’t over-explain [itself - PLEONASM] and it invites multiple readings. We like [that] THIS sort of thing.”

....... nice one C,
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« Reply #5 on: January 12, 2011, 01:15:33 PM »

Thanks all!

Daniel, that's a wonderfully pedantic reading.  Wink
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« Reply #6 on: January 12, 2011, 01:28:03 PM »

Cool intro afro
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« Reply #7 on: January 12, 2011, 02:07:18 PM »

Congrats! Very cool!  dance
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« Reply #8 on: January 12, 2011, 02:40:53 PM »

That's cool, Delph!   Wink
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« Reply #9 on: January 12, 2011, 03:23:21 PM »

No inverted commas needed, delph smiley
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« Reply #10 on: January 12, 2011, 09:51:13 PM »

Very complimentary!   dance
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« Reply #11 on: January 13, 2011, 03:47:22 AM »

It has a sort of a dreamscape quality that we all found very intriguing

look how deletiing a single letter can make all the difference:-

It has a sort of [a] dreamscape quality that we all found very intriguing..... Wink
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« Reply #12 on: January 13, 2011, 04:20:04 AM »

Thanks all!

and Daniel, I agree, their intro is a bit wordy, but they're Welsh! They love words. Of course they want to use as many as possible. Try saying the sentence out loud with a strong Welsh accent. It works. Say it in received English, on the other hand, and the instinct is to drop the spare 'a'.
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« Reply #13 on: January 13, 2011, 04:33:33 AM »

so the welsh use a lot of words and they read out aloud?   hmmmm....... never would have guesed .......  --- thanks delf
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« Reply #14 on: January 13, 2011, 05:32:55 AM »

Yep. Read it in the style of Richard Burton doing Under Milk Wood (or War of the Worlds, according to preference) and it sounds even better smiley
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