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« on: November 11, 2004, 12:23:24 AM »

Man's Creation
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We as man yearn to create
what we create often becomes more useful
what becomes more useful often becomes more adept
what becomes more adept often becomes more intelligent
what becomes more intelligent often becomes less dependent of the less intelligent
what becomes less dependent of the less intelligent often becomes rebelious
what becomes rebelious often becomes more violent and independent
what becomes more independent often doesnt have much desire for its creators.
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sorry if it doesnt really sound poetic, but it definitly says something about how our future may turn out if we aren't careful about how we go about it.
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« Reply #1 on: November 11, 2004, 03:25:25 AM »

hmm

If you try to follow a certain pattern it will make it more palatable.

The ideas are there, just need to work on the presentation.
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« Reply #2 on: November 11, 2004, 03:38:14 AM »

You know, the pattern is actually what i like most about this pieceĀ  smiley

I feel it could be elaborated on, maybe, but it really is a very good analogy of man. I like the representation, and the content, it reads as if it could use something else, when looking at if in poetry perspective, but unfortunately, I do not know what.

Regardless, good jobĀ  cheers


Okay an edit so as to not confuse you...........I like your repetory pattern and Neuro was referring to a meteric pattern.  heh
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« Reply #3 on: November 11, 2004, 11:33:51 AM »

yeah, it was just a thought that poped into my head. I was thinking about the matrix at the time.  bangh
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